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Learn to Fly by ~kittypwnsjoo:iconkittypwnsjoo:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Open


The cage door is open
The window is broken
A clear shot from here to the sky,

For season by season
I watch colors fly by
I watch the others fly, fly by day

It's so close to me
Yet so terribly far away
Doesn't seem to matter what I do or say

I am broken
I'm unable
I can't turn
The table
I just want
To be there
Experiences
I want to share
Don't leave me behind
I'm calling to you
Help me I'll follow
Just let me come too

Help my fix my broken wings
So I can learn to fly
Help me fix these empty things
I watch colors fly by...
I watch colors fly by...
©2008-2009 ~kittypwnsjoo
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Author's Comments

Written for :icondeadpoet363:

Hm... Some parts sound better when said aloud. I'm not entirely sure about this one, but it was certainly good to write, and reminded me why I'm so in love with poetry. There are no rules in freeform.

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~Sumomo-Hanako May 6, 2008, 12:28:22 PM
This is beautiful. Sad, yet beautiful.

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"I love you more because I won't die for you. I'll live for you, and only you." ~ Gary
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~kittypwnsjoo May 6, 2008, 12:37:36 PM
Thanks. That's what I was aiming for.

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Take me away, we'll jump in the car, drive till the gas runs out and then walk so far and we can't see this place anymore
Take a day off, give it a rest, till I forget about this mess,
If I lighten up a little bit, I will be...
(Takemeaway) over it
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~deadpoet363 May 6, 2008, 3:20:25 PM
Beautiful, simply beautiful. There's no more to say but congratulations, and that this piece has a lot of depth and meaning. I just love it.

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My pen bleeds and beats with each stroke, with each metaphor it strikes a chord and words come to life.
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~kittypwnsjoo May 6, 2008, 3:32:35 PM
Thanks so much! I know it sounds kinda lame but... Means alot, coming from you.

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Take me away, we'll jump in the car, drive till the gas runs out and then walk so far and we can't see this place anymore
Take a day off, give it a rest, till I forget about this mess,
If I lighten up a little bit, I will be...
(Takemeaway) over it
:icondeadpoet363:
~deadpoet363 May 7, 2008, 5:56:07 PM
Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder, as is fault. I see in this great beauty, and little fault. I certainly wouldn't use lame. If that's how you feel about the piece that's fine, but completely and honestly I find it wonderful. It actually flows a lot like a slam piece, or so I think, and I really like that sort of style.

--
My pen bleeds and beats with each stroke, with each metaphor it strikes a chord and words come to life.
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